Make it free!
I want the stripes for free
Missing Chapters
That said, a) she annoys me. And b) I swear it’s missing chapters.
I just finished chapter 9 and 10 of one where this skeleton serial killer that tried to eat her twice now had just finished attacking her and the hero had saved her. This thing eats people and has been hunting in the alley for like weeks. There is no telling how many people it has killed and clearly it keeps coming back even after it’s been kicked out. So the the hero and the other two enforcers of the world agree the best thing to do is kill it so it can’t kill anyone else. Especially since they all like her and this time it specifically targeted her to draw out the hero. And she’s like “omg no don’t!” Which frankly is dumb. And hero does kill it. And she’s like “omg I don’t know him at all. I see why people are scared of him. I’m scared of him to now.” Like…he just saved your life AGAIN. And took out a serial killing skeleton. Like…what exactly did you want him to? He beat up the skeleton before and it just came back. Do you want him to just set it free and have it continue to eat people? There doesn’t appear to be a prison here so it’s either let it keep killing or kill it.
And then immediately after her internal “do I even know him? I thought he was kind but maybe I was only seeing what I wanted to” internal monologue, she says she doesn’t hate him but maybe doesn’t really know him. Chapter ends.
The very next chapter they’re suddenly no longer in an alley and he has her pined to the floor and is making out with her and they’re confessing their love? What? How did we get here? She hadn’t even seemed to admit to herself she loved him and was still saying she wanted to be friends. Only two chapters ago he freaked out over her touching his hand and was still resistant to just being around her. And now suddenly he’s like “you’re mine. I love you”?
He’s got like years of trauma from his parents death and just POOF. All gone? Plus I am convinced part of why he was so standoffish is because he made comments at earlier that suggested he knew his friend liked her was distancing himself for that reason too. But nope. That’s just dropped. And what happened to her feeling like she no longer knew him. Heck, what happened between her freaking out over almost dying and then witnessing him kill the skeleton that attacked her in an alley to them being back at the bakery on the floor together? Like it was a massive plot jump. I had to exit and restart both chapters because I was convinced I missed something.
I don’t even know if I want to continue now because like it feels like there was an error and I just read the end but missed the middle. Or if it wasn’t the end I don’t know if I want to keep reading because like so many things hadn’t been resolved or had been introduced and haven’t gone anywhere. And it would be annoying every time something dramatic happened it just jumped to being resolved.