Writing needs to be concise. Less is more, conversation drag on for two long. Needs some sort of spark in the conversation, which seems passive also conversations were dull. Also romance exposition was kind of cheesy too many lines that sounded cheesy and presentation of the lines were off. You probably need to study some other romance visual novels to see how they present and what they write. Good first attempt.
Also needs a save point before the second trial, too much rng for deaths and then you have to start over. And lose like 2 hours of your progress and all the coins and items you’ve spent during that time.
CGI and events were ok. Weird asking for email, will probably put off a lot of people if keep asking for email as log in rather have a guest log in available.
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Machine brain
Graceyye
Sydg.18