Needs work
The story has many grammatical errors that needs to be fixed.
The story at some moments seems rushed as well. When the “blue flamed” character trains with another character the training was so short it felt more like a show off of strength than a training.
What I will saw now is a personal preference but this story deals with minor biblical references. It’s not that the story speaks about biblical things but the story is based on a holy, religious world which I’m not interested in.
Just listing this down just in case people aren’t in to it either.
The story at some moments seems rushed as well. When the “blue flamed” character trains with another character the training was so short it felt more like a show off of strength than a training.
What I will saw now is a personal preference but this story deals with minor biblical references. It’s not that the story speaks about biblical things but the story is based on a holy, religious world which I’m not interested in.
Just listing this down just in case people aren’t in to it either.
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Love it
I Loved reading this. I must say there were a couple spelling errors but all in all good read
Great Concept But Needs Editing
I love the story, but it needs to be revised by a native English speaker. There are too many ESL spelling errors and the sentence structure is sometimes awkward, making it difficult to smoothly read.
Beautiful
I LOVED this game!! The character interactions, the lovey dovey scenes, the action and the puzzles were all perfect. Definitely my favorite text based game and i'm waiting another one by the same author. Who is he btw? I'd like to gve him/her my thanks for producing such an amazing game. And no, I am not a bot.
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A beautiful story
Definitely a must read since it's free
