Sigh...
I am a huge fan of Choice of Games, and even more of a fan of the games put on Hosted Games. I looked at the reviews before buying this, thinking that I could get past a few grammar mistakes, a few misspellings... I was wrong, for I couldn't get past the fourth page. The story seems fine, but it's too much of a pain to have to sit and think on what every sentence really is saying. I'm really hoping for an updated version so that I can enjoy what the author has created.
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Save Your Money
I don't usually write reviews, but I had to warn others against buying this. The grammar is so bad I have a difficult time understanding what is going on most of the time. Your money would be better spent on another app. Seriously. Do not purchase.
Do not buy this game!
In it's current form this game is impossible to decipher. And for some reason the author uses the word "Azure" in almost every other sentence. The poor quality of this game is astounding and I am left to wonder how this game was released in it's current form.
Awful
Do not waste your money on this. The writing is barely coherent and riddled with basic spelling and grammar mistakes. Somebody should have screened this before putting it on the app store. It's unfortunate to see the quality of Hosted Games deteriorate like this. My recommendation: Buy a decent game like Zombie Exodus instead.
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Bad grammar
I'm not very far into the book, but I've had to stop reading already . The grammar is terrible and makes the story completely unreadable. It's almost like it was written in a different language and the editors just used a free web translator service and published it that way. Really needs some editing.
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Disappointing
I don't really write reviews that often, but I just wanted to say that I found the mistakes and poor writing distracting. It's such a shame, because the concept could be truly great. I just wish the author had given this to an editor or just had someone read it, I couldn't even finish it. And another thing! Why the heck is it $1.99?! I spent 2 dollars on an unreadable story...
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So bad.
The writing is so terrible that I honestly gave up and deleted the app after 3 pages. I don't believe English is the authors first language, and I don't believe I would have enjoyed this app even if it had been free. Do not waste your money. Other review is likely written by the author. Read the writing in the description sample pages carefully and you'll see the problems.
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Uh...
The game appears to have a complex role playing system to it. That's the only good thing as the author's use of English isn't very good. The story and characters would have gone a long way with some editing, and I can't help but wonder why Choice of Games gave this one a go.
It is rather heartbreaking considering the time and effort that was put into making this game and I commend the author for such hard work. That can only get you so far though as the game becomes unintentionally hilarious with poor grammar and sentence structure.
Perhaps with some editing I can recommend the game, but until then you might wanna pass.
It is rather heartbreaking considering the time and effort that was put into making this game and I commend the author for such hard work. That can only get you so far though as the game becomes unintentionally hilarious with poor grammar and sentence structure.
Perhaps with some editing I can recommend the game, but until then you might wanna pass.
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It's got a lot of potential, but needs an editor. Badly.
This story is very creative and shows an interesting and in-depth world that the author has obviously put a lot of work into.
It is unfortunate that it reads like the first draft of a middle school creative writing essay.
To be blunt, it needs an editor to go over it. There are so many grammatical errors in the work that at times it makes the story almost impossible to follow. It should never have been released in its current state.
Please note that this is not a knock against the author, as from what I have been able to glean from the story is an interesting premise. I want to see more, but this work needs to be revised as right now it is a very strong example of how poor grammar can really kill a story.
If I can provide a couple of examples:
"Only ruins" - said the wizard. - "You didn't see what's happened with the big cities of this Empire. It's terrible. Come, the night is coming and I see you're tired. We'll take a rest there".
"Destroyed houses and towers, a green-sparkling grass had grown through the cracks in the stone roads and it was coldly here. Staying here you wanted to think about the terrible and painful past of this city."
"It was already darkly when you've come here and the wizard summoned his silver light onto his staff. The far sky returned its bright stars and Elred was shining glaringly as if it tried to incinerate the worlds."
Three examples from three pages a fair ways into the story. The author shows a certain descriptive flare, but misses some very basic mistakes that even a spell and grammar check in a writing program would flag and correct.
These sorts of mistakes are common throughout the entire work.
As a fan of interactive fiction I really want to like this story. It's creative use of a new idea that hasn't really been tried before. I want to see more, but I also want to be able to understand it.
If the author updates with an edited version, I will gladly change my review to a higher rating.
It is unfortunate that it reads like the first draft of a middle school creative writing essay.
To be blunt, it needs an editor to go over it. There are so many grammatical errors in the work that at times it makes the story almost impossible to follow. It should never have been released in its current state.
Please note that this is not a knock against the author, as from what I have been able to glean from the story is an interesting premise. I want to see more, but this work needs to be revised as right now it is a very strong example of how poor grammar can really kill a story.
If I can provide a couple of examples:
"Only ruins" - said the wizard. - "You didn't see what's happened with the big cities of this Empire. It's terrible. Come, the night is coming and I see you're tired. We'll take a rest there".
"Destroyed houses and towers, a green-sparkling grass had grown through the cracks in the stone roads and it was coldly here. Staying here you wanted to think about the terrible and painful past of this city."
"It was already darkly when you've come here and the wizard summoned his silver light onto his staff. The far sky returned its bright stars and Elred was shining glaringly as if it tried to incinerate the worlds."
Three examples from three pages a fair ways into the story. The author shows a certain descriptive flare, but misses some very basic mistakes that even a spell and grammar check in a writing program would flag and correct.
These sorts of mistakes are common throughout the entire work.
As a fan of interactive fiction I really want to like this story. It's creative use of a new idea that hasn't really been tried before. I want to see more, but I also want to be able to understand it.
If the author updates with an edited version, I will gladly change my review to a higher rating.
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Rip off!
I am familiar with both choice of an hosted games I have given all the others five stars and I respect that someone has put a lot of work into this but the English is appalling and I had ro stop reading after 3 pages I'm surprised this was published and while it has potential had I know what condition it was in I wouldn't have paid money for it. Sorry but I've come to expect better from you guys even if it is only for the price if a cup of coffee I fell very disappointed and frankly cheated with this one
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