Sequel is required
I loved this game, and a sequel is long overdue.
Grammar needs a overhaul
Has so much potential fix the Grammar mistakes and you will be set
My previous review was from 2013 - 2014, am revising
It has been revised somewhat, I have not completed more than the beginning now and will update my new review as I complete it.
Original Review - 1 star
Get an editor who speaks English as a first language. You had a solid idea but need to dramatically improve the quality or make the game free.
Original Review - 1 star
Get an editor who speaks English as a first language. You had a solid idea but need to dramatically improve the quality or make the game free.
Not really interesting
The beginning is so boring I can barley get through it hope the rest of the story is better
I have a lot to say
I'd like to start off by saying that I genuinely enjoyed this game and felt it was worth the time and money I spent on it. The plot and concept is very interesting and I got hooked right away.
That being said, this doesn't feel like a polished work; it doesn't feel finished. There are a TON of grammatical and spelling errors (sometimes to the point of being unreadable but mostly just distracting). Relationships with individual characters are shallow at best, especially the family of your character.
The most damning thing of all, though, was the fact that one of the characters either dies or isn't brought up throughout the rest of the game (depending on your choices). Yes, this could be a setup for a sequel, but more than anything it's really annoying considering how shallow your character's relationships with the other characters are. Not only that, but it makes it glaringly obvious how unnecessary the character is in the entire game (you could just have an already existing character do the few plot relevant things they do with no difference whatsoever).
If I'm honest, I probably want to like this game more than I actually do. The issue is that it reads more like a (very, very) rough first draft rather than a complete story. It needs cleaning up: fix the grammar and spelling, add more meaningful character interactions, and make sure what's being written is actually relevant to the story (sometimes it felt a bit scattered). If those things were to happen I'm sure this would be a 5 star game:)
That being said, this doesn't feel like a polished work; it doesn't feel finished. There are a TON of grammatical and spelling errors (sometimes to the point of being unreadable but mostly just distracting). Relationships with individual characters are shallow at best, especially the family of your character.
The most damning thing of all, though, was the fact that one of the characters either dies or isn't brought up throughout the rest of the game (depending on your choices). Yes, this could be a setup for a sequel, but more than anything it's really annoying considering how shallow your character's relationships with the other characters are. Not only that, but it makes it glaringly obvious how unnecessary the character is in the entire game (you could just have an already existing character do the few plot relevant things they do with no difference whatsoever).
If I'm honest, I probably want to like this game more than I actually do. The issue is that it reads more like a (very, very) rough first draft rather than a complete story. It needs cleaning up: fix the grammar and spelling, add more meaningful character interactions, and make sure what's being written is actually relevant to the story (sometimes it felt a bit scattered). If those things were to happen I'm sure this would be a 5 star game:)
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Many words but not enough story development
I can see that much time and effort is put into this but the writing is long-winded and the pace is slow. 1 dimensional character development and a lot of fighting, walking and talking. Also, all the stats should be displayed in one page to reduce number of clicks to get to the specific stat.
Grammar
The game is pretty cool but the grammar is literal poop. I was cringing. Cool concept, poor delivery.
Great job
I'm very happy that they took the time to fix there typos!!!!!
They fixed it
Fixed most of the grammar issues, there are still a few but it's readable now
Needs to be fixed
I like almost all of the games that this company produces, however, this one needs more work. There are a lot of grammatical errors that make this game hard to read. It is a great game, it just needs some fixes
ZERO Stars!
If I could complain and have this app removed I would. I know the small child who tried to translate this writing into English was probably starved and whipped often but even still he could have done a better job...
Spelling-F
Grammar (use of actual words)-F
Sentence structure-F
Choices-D
Endings- to painful and trying to even continue to the end.
Seems like there is a lot of content here but why would anyone put this up in its current state?
I AM embarrassed and humiliated for this writer and buying this game. I am taking this app off my phone for fear of being seen with it. Horrible just horrible.
I don't even count this as a choice game.
Spelling-F
Grammar (use of actual words)-F
Sentence structure-F
Choices-D
Endings- to painful and trying to even continue to the end.
Seems like there is a lot of content here but why would anyone put this up in its current state?
I AM embarrassed and humiliated for this writer and buying this game. I am taking this app off my phone for fear of being seen with it. Horrible just horrible.
I don't even count this as a choice game.
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Grammar is awful...
Reads like it's been translated from Google Translate in some places. The grammar is terrible and distracting to the point I couldn't get past one chapter.
Would be passable in an adventure or RPG game but in a text game it's inexcusable. Don't waste your money.
Would be passable in an adventure or RPG game but in a text game it's inexcusable. Don't waste your money.
Good, could be better
Pros: very long, good storyline.
Cons: choices only effect stats, and only effect storyline marginally, grammar issues, but you get use to them, and predictability.
Overall it's a good game, if the author could just fix the grammar issues and possibly make the choices have more away in the storyline then this would be possibly THE best choice of games books!
Note to author; Please finish the series, I loved it and would love to see the 2nd 3rd and 4th parts!
- a hopeful reader.
Cons: choices only effect stats, and only effect storyline marginally, grammar issues, but you get use to them, and predictability.
Overall it's a good game, if the author could just fix the grammar issues and possibly make the choices have more away in the storyline then this would be possibly THE best choice of games books!
Note to author; Please finish the series, I loved it and would love to see the 2nd 3rd and 4th parts!
- a hopeful reader.
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Horrible
That's very blunt but true, I can't make my self enjoy this , I tried and failed
You should be ashamed.
What is this rubbish? Terrible grammar.
The writing is incomprehensible.
DO NOT WASTE YOUR MONEY ON THIS.
The writing is incomprehensible.
DO NOT WASTE YOUR MONEY ON THIS.
No
Story was ok at best, but the grammar was so bad. I thought it might get better, but was consistently bad throughout. Also it appears like your choices have no effect on the game.
Nope
The amount of grammar mistakes plus bad sentence structure left me with a headache. This is not worth the 2 dollars I spent
Terrible English & lots of it
Hard to read from dreadful unedited or proofread text, and not an interesting choice or consequence in over 3 long chapters. Not good. Can't remember if I paid, but if I did, I want a refund (seriously). Deleted.
My opinion
I liked the story very much it seems well thought out. The down side is the grammar but personally this doesn't bother me all that much.
Fairly good
The world depth was excellent and the story length was very good. That said the story could have been more understandable had the author used a English fluent editor. If the game had better English it would have been rated a 4.5 to 5 but at its current rating it is still a good game
And expect much from this author in the future
And expect much from this author in the future
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