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Firstly please proof read your writing, some of the spelling is wrong and some of the grammar is bad. Nothing worse than having to figure out what a word is because it’s spelt wrong.
Second there is far too much writing. I know it’s meant to be a story driven game, but no one wants to read pages of text. Just some understanding to get to the next area.
Third the stats, having 1 stat point for each stat type is so long winded. You will inevitably lose in certain sections because the stats don’t add up and it just becomes frustrating. It needs to be more straightforward and user friendly.
Finally the choices. Why is there a choice to go (left or right). There’s a section where you’re told left left right or something and in that situation it’s fine because it’s a memory short game. However having pointless choices such as left or right or up or down really doesn’t provide much of an experience for the player. Give them an informed option (such as in delight games), where they can make a life or death decision but they’re actually intuitive not just directional.
Response from developer
Thank you for taking the time to write such a detailed review. It is much appreciated. I will try to address some of your feedback here: Spelling and grammar: We recognize this issue and are working on a solution. As non-native English speakers, it can be hard to pinpoint these errors, so we are exploring other options. To much writing: We aimed for something that feels like a mix between an interactive book and a game, so there are currently no plans to reduce the text size. Stats: Point taken. It's something that we should look into. Choices: I'm sorry you felt the choices were pointless. A simple choice, like left or right, can actually change the path you take quite drastically, even if it’s not a 'life or death' decision. One of my personal criticisms of the Delight Games stories I’ve tried is that, no matter whether you go 'left or right,' you’re always kept on the same path. That’s something we tried to do differently with this game.
